3D Artist

very nice modeling mate, looks very impressive.

From a design and aerodynamics standpoint though, I'd just suggest that that the wings and vertical tail surfaces look a bit small compared to the size of the aircraft. You could probably remove the elevators (horizontal fins behind the wing), seeing as you have the canard surfaces just behind the cockpit.

Also, it looks rather nose-heavy. If you bring the leading edge of the wings forward and make them a bit bigger, that will help, but maybe just thicken up the aft fuselage. In the underside view it looks dramatically smaller than the rest of the fuselage.

*takes off his aerospace hat* :-)

Aside from those suggestions, and depending on how realistic you want the design to be (realistic doesn't always make it look awesome), the modeling looks really good, well done.

Cheers,
Craig.

Great to see it completed Tim, looks fantastic.

All the best,

- Tom

Haha. Thx guys.

Yea all those points about the realism and aerodynamics of it did occur to me as I was making it, but like you said I was going for more something that looks cool, rather than an actual functioning real-world aircraft.
The design is essentially an F22 wing span, with F23 engines, canards (just cause canards look sweet) with an overall bird like (that is to say, more organic) form. Those were the main things I was going for when I was deigning it anyway.

Glad you liked it. :)

I posted some wires as well but they dont seem to have shown up

oh the base is a quick normal mapped object from zbrush and the dead guy is just an altered an re-textured version of Jacques

The arm and forearm of the model on the ground looks a little off. My first thought was that it looked way too thin, but considering the angle the arm is seen at, and that the thickness of the blood was covering a portion of the arms, it may not entirely be an anatomical issue. It would probably also help if you positioned his arms and hands/fingers a bit more naturally on the floor, I guess.

I'm guessing the focus really is the model standing up, since you provided the wireframe and texture shots of it, and hey, it looks good.

your absolutely right with the dead body he was posed before i had a rig and was manipulated with transpose in zbrush during the process the proportions got skewed and since the due date for the project has just passed it wasn't something i fixed.

im not willing to leave any comments as this image could have some sort of deeper meaning.

cool concept :)

AIE should be ashamed, who sets the quality benchmark over there?

Basically, the piece looks ridiculous.

To make it awesome and not ridiculous please, please, please do the following:

Dead guy
1. Spend some time and make a proper civilian mesh (a serial killer wouldn’t murder a balaclava clad mercenary)

2. Make the dead body a woman? (more appropriate)

3. Pose the dead body in an artistic and extravagant way; like he\she has been murdered and posed (he's an artiste, right? Keep with your theme) Arms outstretched, mimicking a character in a famous painting (or something)

4. The paint brushes are just stuck in the body really lame. Stick the paint brushes in where they would cause death. Stick one in his 'heart', one in his eye, maybe 1 for each hand and foot so the body is 'crucified'? Make it really fucking dark, he's a serial killer for god’s sake.

5. The blood pool looks awful. Do something with it, maybe the killer has 'painted' with the blood and tried to create a work of art. Mix some blood brush strokes with the dead body pose (as discussed above) make it striking and dynamic, he's an artiste, right? Reinforce your theme.

6. Fix that small arm, why would you present something to an audience that you know is wrong?

Background
Red background looks awful, if you have limited time just use an entirely black background and a couple of light sources to light the scene. Use dramatic lighting and spend a bit of time with light placement to get some cool shadows. Experiment a bit, and come up with a simple but effect background with some simple lighting. Watch some classic horror movies to see how they achieve dramatic lighting for reference.

Jacques
1. He looks awful just standing there; he looks half asleep and expressionless like he doesn't give a shit. Solution? Pose him properly. Maybe he's examining the body from a specific angle, holding his hands and fingers together to 'frame' his work (victim) and choosing a good angle. Do you know what I mean?

2. The long smock is a good start, go nuts with blood and different paint colours on it.

3. Add some finger drag marks to the smock, like dieing victims have clutched it in their death throes

4. Do something with his clothes, they're dull. Research some famous early century artist's on Google and see what they wear. Find some cool stuff, and dress the character up with your own modern interpretation

5. The fogged up glasses and facial expression look bad; can we see his eyes through the glasses? He needs an expression dude, give him some life. A big evil smile or grin? Maybe he’s elated and wide eyed with glee after killing his latest victim. Give the guy some character; he's too lifeless and generic. Looks like Gordon Freeman in a beret (*yawn*) Make him more unique looking.

Floor plate.
The floor plate with the stone tile texture looks crap, just do a simple concrete floor that fades to black (refer to lighting as above)

If you want to get somewhere in this tough, tough industry you need to push yourself. Spend some time implementing the feedback, repost, and sit back and watch the positive reactions roll in, ok?

I look forward to seeing your talent develop and in seeing how far you can push your creativity.

Marty

All things considered this is not at all bad. My first attempts at character modelling were actually much worse.
It would be good if we could be constructive in our criticism and also bear in mind the experience level of those on the receiving end.

Good on you for showing us your work, it takes a lot of nerve to do this. Don't let a bit of negative feedback put you off. If you persevere you will almost definitely improve in leaps and bounds.

Hi,

Is it better maya than 3ds?. Im learning by myself but i want a good pogram to manipulate and do stuff like these.

Thanks for the post.

Regards,

Marco

If you would like to view the work in progress thread for how I created this image you can view this link:
http://forums.cgsociety.org/showthread.php?f=43&t=821316

Please also feel free to view my online portfolio:
www.michael-mcdonald.com

no a in resume just a funny ' thing over the e
nice model though

hello.

no disrespect intended. your model cool, your texture is great, but i feel a few things could improved the overall look in my opinion of cause. ;-)

the blue jewls just dont seem right. i think you need to choose a different color perhaps a dark - light red or an orange. say ruby or amber.
i think by making this slight change to the texture, the overall look of the model will really increase.

hope this advice helps. ;-)
cheers
Paul

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Contact me if you are interested - cyndaspell@gmail.com

It is based on this comic book - http://www.myebook.com/index.php?option=ebook&id=10892

Nice use of low poly resources. Only thing that looks out of place in my mind is the roof and the lack of it's solidness. [it's a 2D plane]

But if i was viewing this model from a table top view though that wouldn't be an issue.

The material you've used is great, are they eyes intentional though? They look unfinished.

I'd reduce the whiteness, bring it down to a gray, or go the other way and give them a glow and go much brighter.

I'm uncertain whether large portions of that video adequately demonstrate your ability. Are you attempting to market yourself as a 3D artist or a video compositor? If both, I would recommend you do so in separate showreels do demonstrate only the appropriate abilities for any job for which you apply.

That said, I'm not an artist and nor do I work in HR, this is just my quasi-professional opinion.

Its an alright start, i might suggest though that you should never render backgrounds in black, your house is too hard to see anything other then black and a light source. If you want a dark background then have a small amount of self illumination on the model. Nothing in games or film has a jet black shadow that blocks everything unless its intentionally for artistic purposes. It never hurts to display some stats for your work, as in time spent, texture size, tri count. With your dragon rotation its way to jerky, i would recommend a smooth 360 rotation, if you want to show close ups have some nice still renders. It also never hurts to have your email always showing throughout the reel in a bottom corner.
Keep at it, a great demo reel is all about polish.

Please understand, people show no mercy when it comes to art. Everything you see around you is commercialized to the point that it's flawless. People will compare you to those flawless works of art, no matter how much you ask them to give you some slack because your just starting out. Ask yourself this, if you were to see a movie in the cinemas, would you watch it if it looked like your reel?

shows that you are starting to understand some great principals behind compositing, and 3d to that matter.
keep up the good work. the last comment is very true in the industry.. set your goals high and keep up with the journey.